The fourth in my (long-delayed) series of screenwriting scriptcasts showing how I'd rewrite scenes. This one focuses on dialogue, using an actual scene from Lance Edmand's Bluebird. (With his blessing.)
Because it's a longer scene than the others, there's more scrolling. You may want to check the before-and-afters in scrippet form posted at
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