
condition:human Episode 5
4 months ago
Sean makes more inquiries about the possibility of having Kyoko modded. Gina (Sean's mother) makes a surprise visit to Sean's home.
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It really made me cling to what's gonna happen next.
Marco - The story came from a lot of different things we'd been thinking about. Of course there are some cinematic influences but many of those are more related to style then story. I'd say the single biggest factor in coming up with the story was peoples present relationships to (and thru) technology. As we thought about everything from text messaging, internet dating, social networks and MMOs we starting thinking about where it might all go and humanoids were one outlet in which we could express a changing point in the way in which humans relate to tech.
I was hoping the scene from 7:30-8:50 or so would be good. However I was disappointed, the main char. shots are framed well and with good lighting, however, it is painfully clear that somehow the audio is out of sync with the 'moder' and out of sync is pretty bad even for a webisode. I bet there was some issue with the first take, and he wasn't able to go back and re-shoot. But really he should have to keep the quality up. Don't compromise, think of a way to do it differently if you can't do what you originally planned.
The acting has gotten better, and some of the filming is still good, but I wish he could keep his lighting good and add the to the ambiance audio. I think it would improve the story rather than act as a trigger for ripping me out of the plot and the performance. Also, I wish we could have seen some edgier plot with the moder, this character could be really dark and interesting, could meet in interesting surroundings to enforce his persona. Under a bridge at dusk with full sunlight was just poor location selection. However the script was very good.
ps. This critique is only to make what SHOULD BE the best HV20 show on the net, THE BEST HV20 SHOW ON THE NET.
Only suggestion is, audio is still rough. You need to capture some ambient/nat sound still. Also, the music just doesn't...feel right. You might want to try hooking up with these guys:
willowtreeaudio.com/demos.html
Particularly, I was listening to this track, and thought something similar might fit in your production:
willowtreeaudio.com/media/LoveMainThemev2.mp3
They do the music for another web-based show ("The Escapist" video game review).
Keep up the good work!
Can't wait for EP6!!!
Sorry about the ridiculously long wait on episode 6. We're in the midst of finally getting it finished now. Hopefully you'll all be seeing the conclusion soon.