Mark Kammel

Some seriously beautiful shots here, some of the best stuff ive seen on vimeo.

There are a lot of good shots here really. The beginning definitely made me feel like a dream (with the airplanes). As it progressed it began to feel like some candid footage followed by shots of a church. The abrupt ending in my opinion could definitely work, but I'd recommend re-editing and commit to making it extremely abrupt instead of going half-way and clipping to credits with even more music. I'd suggest clipping to credits with no music, or just clip to black, everyone knows your name and title of the film as it is already on the top.

I realize that this response has a 6 month delay, as I did not see it until now. But my portfolio for applying to massart was mainly film/video and this was in it, and i got in (and im a freshman now :-P)