This is the second edit. After the first edit, I recorded some new scenes, played with some extra effects (screen in screen! overlay! blur transitions! - I know I have gone overboard with the blur transitions...). I have also recorded further new material with some new characters so I will do a third edit with this new material.
I asked advice of some professional filmmakers and they've offered to take me through the process of storyboarding which will hopefully clarify both my storyline and edits.
I just released my debut solo album 'Close as a Slow Dance'. I have written video treatments for 2.5 songs from the album but I have no budget to have a film clip made. When I was a kid, my Dad obtained books where you cut out and glued together your own scale model cardboard theatre and Victorian house. I couldn't bear to cut the books up, but it stayed in my mind.
When I thought about making this filmclip in particular, I thought a shoebox theatre would tell the story without being ultra-literal, so I've made the set (a dirty, cheap motel) in a showbox and my cast (the 'I' in the song, the 'he' in the song and 'his' 'friends' out of tracing paper, pencil, black card and photocopies.
I took some test footage using candles for backlighting and Thai ball lights and a bicycle light for front lighting. This is the 2nd edit. I'd appreciate feedback on my experiments and how to do this better.